1. is such a solid, excellent premise - I wonder how it would look with some specificity- Like “How I Would Have Told Time Before It Existed” - more words, I appreciate! Or “How The English Told Time Before It Existed” or even taking a spin with less words and more capacity to prod at people a bit: “How Birds Tell Time”. 2. is a romp, 3. would have some funny reps too!
#5 Reminds me of bit we did on my Radio show, "Minivan Mom." We'd randomly choose a Minivan Mom & ask her to find an object in 30 seconds, i.e. pacifier, a french fry, a sock, etc. & if she found it she'd win a prize. Quite eye opening what are in some of those cars!!
Ok yes i started to really go down a rabbit hole of what “your moms ______” could be and there are some very funny alternatives. gonna play around with this
Love how #1 flips the narrative and gets on travel's most-hated person's side.
#5 is just absurdly funny.
#2: the "setup" (first part of the headline) is very strong, I feel like you could find a stronger "punchline" ("to shower").
#3: similar to the above: it's a little close to reality. I feel like you could absurd-up what the IKEA tips could help with. Or darken (and in this case keep logically believable), e.g. "save you from continuously losing your babies"
I like 5 too! It's just got a lot of room to go some strange places that turn escaping the grind into a quest, and there's little more I relish than trivialising modern work conditions. I'll let you know how 2. goes if I follow through - thanks Alex.
I'm always like, 'I promise I'll spend more time appreciating the gifts of the everyday if you end this absolute hell." Maybe a funnier piece would be God's considerations of requests for ending IBS upset...
1) My father was great, he would always play games with me. Mostly psychological. Hide and deceit. Who can stay silent for the longest.
2)Since Covid my neighbour went completely anti vax, it's all he wants to talk about. He’s fixated , rigid thinking . Somehow by not taking the vaccine, he ended up with autism
3)Andrew Tate is a terrible role model, time for a new leader of the bald community
4) We didn’t say the rosary at home – we only done Catholic things other people could see
I think 1 has a voice, a mission, and there'd be so many amazing call-outs you could do about how epically long fantasy novels can get for the most ridiculous reasons.
#4 also very funny, and literally biting. As a non-parent and anti-having-kids, it made me feel superior to parents. So it worked not because of relatability or empathy, but the opposite.
3 is too real right now. :…( 5 sounds really funny! If you do 1, I think you’d have to give us brief, unobtrusive refresher somehow for those of us who haven’t read the novel in a while!
Day 5 on the humor challenge track, with headlines of varying lengths. Again, thanks for the rec in today’s newsletter.
1. An Adaptation of Dogtanian and the Three Muskehounds, With Humans Instead of Animals, Written by Someone Completely Unfamiliar With the Original Story by Alexandre Dumas.
2. MC Escher Hip-Hop Album Gets Mixed, Contradictory Reviews
3. Hercules at the Job Fair
4. We Sailed the Deadliest Seas in Search of the Giant X on the Map And All We Got Was This Lousy Chest of Gold
5. Pied Piper of Hamelin Auditions for the Band on the Titanic
I think 5 would be great because there's sooo much room for you to make hilarious jokes about how his rider is 50 children who he has to keep enthralled at all times so they don't realise they've been abducted from their German village. I do wonder if there are other things you could also have him audition for (i.e. it could just be me but packing the Titanic and Pied Piper together didn't strike me as the most natural fit for a joke even thought it's entertaining!) such as Lower Saxony's Got Talent or something?
I think this is mostly a function of me not being familiar with the other references. I live in the US but didn't grow up here, & on top of that, general pop culture awareness/interest is below average - in case that helps as a data point.
Btw I think you could drop "of Hamelin"! Unless that was deliberate in trying to make it sound more formal, or some other reason. I've heard of Pied Piper (enough to get the joke), but when I saw "of Hamelin", I had to google that to see if there was an obvious joke there that I wasn't getting.
Hard to choose a favorite, but #1! I'm not sure if the titled intended to hint at this, but my brain immediately started thinking about these emojis pleading for their lives 😂
3, 4, and 5 are great. 4 is so relatable and also you've got a fantastic comedic form there ready to go for a hilarious piece with callbacks, cyclical thinking, spiralling etc. I'd want to read that one!
Hey y'all, stand up jokes...let me know which you think is strongest or feel free to offer any suggestions on how to tighten/improve.
1. My mother was tough. She’d insist I follow her rules. She thought she knew everything. But at the end of her life she softened and said she found God. Which was weird because in her mind SHE was God....Wait, does that mean I have a half-brother?
2. When my kids were growing up I worried about bullying, drugs, drinking. And that’s just at the family reunion.
3. When I was a teenager, I asked my mom if I needed to douche. She said, no, my vagina was like a self-cleaning oven. Don’t put anything in there that you wouldn’t put in your mouth. I can tell you tampons taste awful.
#2 is my favorite. I like #3, but I immediately went to.
When I was a teenager, I asked my mom if I needed to douche. She said, no, my vagina was like a self-cleaning oven. Just wipe out the ash once a month.
#3 and #4 didn't work as strongly for me, because (as a guy) i already know axe won't get me laid. my hunch is that most people watching those ads feel the same. so wondering if it expectation could be thwarted in some other way? sorry i don't have a useful suggestion, because just going with the opposite "axe WILL get you laid" doesn't work either, coz that's what the ad is saying. sorry don't know if this helped at all!
#1 and #4 both made me LOL. Anyone who thinks AXE Dark Temptation Body Spray is an aphrodisiac needs to keep at minimum six feet social distance. (Let's see what sort of punishment for adding a sixth.)
oh my gosh I love 5, but I think 1 I want to see on a personal level as someone who went to a very abstract art exhibit where I felt like I'd been conned.
Love attacking advertisers in #5. Wonder if it becomes funnier if you add a name into the headline to it gets REALLY personal. like, "We Customized This Ad Just For You, Mark, And You're Going To Ignore It, You Ungrateful Son Of A Bitch?"
Thank you! For #2, I was inspired by financial conflicts of interest disclosures and questionnaires done in healthcare/research compliance. I was thinking of making one that would more so filter out people who may give 'bad' or cheesy gifts. I wouldn't want it to sound like a diss on broke/poor people, though, as that sounds too mean-spirited, so I'll think about it some more.
Hi all, here's my Friday Five (humor headlines). Some pithier than others...
1. Let's Get Down To Brass Tacks: Holy Shit Are Those Things Ugly
2. 10 No-Fail Weeknight Meal Ideas for Failures
3. They're Back to School! Go Get 'Em Kaylie (Kindergarten), Devin (2nd Grade), and Leonard (Continuing Education Class in Urban Farming, Tuesdays at 7).
4. Your Weekly Screen Time Report, With Judgy Commentary
5. I Placed Third in a Reality Baking-Engineering Competition Show. So Why am I Still Unemployable?
Oh no! I think the title is crisp and clear, I immediately knew what kind of satire it was generally going to be and here for it whatever form it takes.
Hi - thanks, and great question. I think the premise here is that it always feels awful to see how much time you spend on meaningless apps, and this will make you feel even worse. So the voice, I think, is your smart phone, all-knowing and getting very granular about your app choices. like "Huh, 37 minutes on Candy Crush Saga Sunday morning - I noticed you were at the softball park. Did you at least look up when your daughter was at bat, or did you not want to lose that lollipop hammer?" Thoughts?
The ai caring more about the daughter is great, and would be a fun through-line if it got progressively more angry that the phone owner was missing precious moments.
Humor piece headlines. Which one(s) should I write?
1. How People Told Time Before They Knew Time Existed
2. Is It A Genie, Or Just Some Asshole Who Lives In A Lamp?
3. It’s Crazy How Much Money You Have To Make Just To Have Any Money
4. Whoops, I Woke Up 7 Hours Too Late Again
5. Kafka’s Asbestos Factory
I like #2 because I can't imagine a sane reason for a person to live in a lamp, and #5 I don't fully understand, which makes me want to read on.
#1 and #2!
Same. 1 and 2.
#2 genies have gotten away with too much! #4 also v relatable
Love 1. I wonder did they TELL time by word of mouth?
All good, but laughed out loud at #2.
I love #2 and #3. I'm also curious about #1.
very intrigued by 1 and 2. what kind of asshole lives in a lamp? need to know.
All this time business sounds like a good topic for a philosophy thesis
1. is such a solid, excellent premise - I wonder how it would look with some specificity- Like “How I Would Have Told Time Before It Existed” - more words, I appreciate! Or “How The English Told Time Before It Existed” or even taking a spin with less words and more capacity to prod at people a bit: “How Birds Tell Time”. 2. is a romp, 3. would have some funny reps too!
I like #4. Why so late? And what happened as a result? #5 sounds like it would make a good short story!
#1 and #3 for me!
Number 2!
I'm in the #1 and #2 camp!
Love #1, #3 and #5 - Kafka's Asbestos Factory, it's triple depressing lol...
Number 1. I'd love to see you handle that one without imploding reality.
Fake genie yappin’ ‘bout granting three wishes …
probably just blowin’ smoke …
puffin’ on a vape
DAY 5 LET'S GO. here are my headlines:
1. 9 Business Tips From Your Local Lemonade Stand Kids
2. You’ve Been Cooking Your Ice Cream All Wrong
3. A 10-Course Meal Curated by the Cast of Jackass
4. Wilderness Survival Tips From the Ghost of Steve Irwin
5. I’m Your Mom’s Minivan and Boy Have I Seen Some Shit
I like the surreal quality of 2
5 good too
#5 Reminds me of bit we did on my Radio show, "Minivan Mom." We'd randomly choose a Minivan Mom & ask her to find an object in 30 seconds, i.e. pacifier, a french fry, a sock, etc. & if she found it she'd win a prize. Quite eye opening what are in some of those cars!!
this is hilarious, what a great idea!
Love this. Maybe for an extra challenge seat a half dozen 16-year old boys in the minivan while she is searching?
Yes!! LOL!
Thats such a great idea for a radio show!
I love #5. It could also be a series. "I'm your Mom's jeans..."
Ok yes i started to really go down a rabbit hole of what “your moms ______” could be and there are some very funny alternatives. gonna play around with this
I like 1 and 5
#2 and #5!
I want to know what's going on in that minivan!
hahaha these are all strong!
#2 and #5 made me lol.
#3 and #4 would've probably hit harder had I watched either of those on TV.
#1 sounds actually legit, and hence less funny. I'm not entrepreneurial at all so I'd read that non-ironically.
Ha! These are all great, but I love #2 and #5
1!
I love #2, #4 and #5.
I like 2!
1 and 5 for me!
2,4, and 5 for me!
#2 intrigues me.
I like 1 and 5! I really would love to see what the minivan has seen though.
I like 5.
Hello everyone - here are my latest headlines for the Humor Writing Track.
1. The Secret To Backseat Driving
2. Daily Self-Care Affirmations So Effective You Won't Need To Shower
3. 12 Simple DIY IKEA Hacks That Can Save Your Marriage
4. How To Determine If There's A Hyper-Realistic Cake In Your Apartment
5. Tonight's Sleepscape: Your Neighbor's Awkward Bonkfest
Thanks again for all your feedback so far!
I like all 5 of these
First thought 1, 2, and 3--love them. Then I looked up "Hyper-Realistic Cakes" & LMAO!!
UWP Yer popular! My favs are 1,2,3
I go for 1, 2, and 3. Love the idea of affirmations, and saving your marriage with IKEA (no batteries needed).
1 and 2 💪
My vote is 2 :)
4, because now I need to know. That headline grabs hard
#2, #4, and #5 for the use of the word "Bonkfest"
1 is soooo funny.
#1 and #5 for me!
Love how #1 flips the narrative and gets on travel's most-hated person's side.
#5 is just absurdly funny.
#2: the "setup" (first part of the headline) is very strong, I feel like you could find a stronger "punchline" ("to shower").
#3: similar to the above: it's a little close to reality. I feel like you could absurd-up what the IKEA tips could help with. Or darken (and in this case keep logically believable), e.g. "save you from continuously losing your babies"
Thanks!
I agree with you about #2 - I'll try to amp up the exaggeration.
Hahaha. I love your dark twist on #3 - amazing!
The first 4 are all excellent! Write these, please!
OMG, I'm obsessed with that guy on Instagram who makes the hyper-realistic cakes, so I NEED that one. But I also really like #2 and #3.
I’d love to read 4!
2 is amazing!!
I love 1-4. They are all good just liked the others better
I like 1 and 5.
Hey Everyone! Humour headers again from me. Tried to keep 'em tight. See you in the comments!
1. I STILL NEED SIX EGGS.
2. This Is My First Rodeo
3. Your Missing Socks Are In The Quantum Laundry
4. Things I Promised God In Exchange For Ending An IBS Episode
5. I Escaped The Grind By Distracting The Grindmaster
A heads up: If 1 is confusing, it's a Beauty And The Beast allusion.
I like 3 and 5. Nice weirdness to them
Years ago I tried to write a piece with the same title as 2. So I like that one too, and hope your luck is better
I like 5 too! It's just got a lot of room to go some strange places that turn escaping the grind into a quest, and there's little more I relish than trivialising modern work conditions. I'll let you know how 2. goes if I follow through - thanks Alex.
Ha! Thanks for explaining #1 - I definitely needed that.
I like all of these, but my favorite is #2!
I'd also like to see #2. I'm hoping that rather than literal, it's more of a "beginner's mind" kind of idea. :-)
2! Giddy Up!
5!
Love #2 and #3.
#2!
Really love #2 (so relatable, and yet I want to know more about this quantum laundry)
#2 and #1 are really funny.
The premises provide good starting points.
#1 that’s too expensive. 😉
And I really think #2 could be hilarious!
#2!!
I like 1 best.
2 and 4 are funny to me!
Love 2! I have a sticker that says that but would love to see what actual satire can develop from it.
I didn't catch the Beauty and the Beast allusion, still thought it was funny. That and number 2.
I claim 2 all the time, think 4s my fave though
Chuckled at 4.
I'm always like, 'I promise I'll spend more time appreciating the gifts of the everyday if you end this absolute hell." Maybe a funnier piece would be God's considerations of requests for ending IBS upset...
I'm doing the stand up track.
1) My father was great, he would always play games with me. Mostly psychological. Hide and deceit. Who can stay silent for the longest.
2)Since Covid my neighbour went completely anti vax, it's all he wants to talk about. He’s fixated , rigid thinking . Somehow by not taking the vaccine, he ended up with autism
3)Andrew Tate is a terrible role model, time for a new leader of the bald community
4) We didn’t say the rosary at home – we only done Catholic things other people could see
1 and 2 are my fave
#1 and #3 are my picks!
#1 very funny. Since today's theme is conciseness, (nitpicky) suggestion here to cut the word "for" in "for the longest".
#3 made me laugh! For conciseness (and maybe humor?), how about "a new leader of the balds"?
Thanks for reading, good points well made. Noted, cheers
I love #1 with #4 coming in a close second (from a lapsed Catholic here, I can relate, lol)
Yeah lapsed Irish catholic here - yeah it resonates? Thankfully we we'rent dogmatic but more just concerned with what other people thought ! :-)
They all sound so true, which makes them funny, love #4 the best...
4!
Love 2 and 3.
I like 1!
3 and I'd like you to list some possible alternative bald leaders
Good idea !
2 is my favorite, would love to see more the the Catholic themed horror though.
Big love for #2
All 4 are great. Maybe 1 and 2 are my favs.
Thanks ! Good to know !
I like #2. Consider shortening it.
Thanks, ya i think that's good advice
love the idea that guys like Andrew Tate are bad for the bald community. he's no Mr. Clean, that's for sure
Thanks ! yes he sure aint !
I love #1 with #4 coming in a close second (from a lapsed Catholic here, I can relate, lol)
Here's what I have today!:
1. I’m the Editor of Your 700-Page Fantasy Novel, and, Bud, I Think We Can Make It Even Longer
2. Tactical War Plan: Maximizing Emotional Carnage of Your High School’s Production of 'Grease'
3. Guide to Making Your Exorcism Feel More Inclusive
4. American Girl Doll Union Meeting Minutes
I like 1 and 3
I love #1
#1 is my fave
#3. What would a "trauma-informed" exorcism look like?
I love all of these! If I had to pick, I'd go with #3, #1, #4, and #2
#1, very funny. The 'Bud' sells it.
I like 1 best.
#3, write it!
1 had me cackling but I absolutely must read 4!! Please write it!
I like 4 best.
More love for 1 and 4
I like #3 especially = also #1
these are all great, but i'm dying for #4 and #1 as a close second
#1 is a hilarious idea.
LOVE #4
I think 1 has a voice, a mission, and there'd be so many amazing call-outs you could do about how epically long fantasy novels can get for the most ridiculous reasons.
5 headlines, as short as I could get them today.
1. “Weren't they siblings?” My Review of Wuthering Heights
2. Adding “Tok” to the End of Your Niche Interest Doesn’t Make It a Trend, You Dweeb
3. Rousing the Theater Troupes: A Fascist’s Guide to Taking Over the Arts
4. “What Do I Do with Their Teeth?” And Other Parenting Quandaries
5. "I Never Knew He Was a War Profiteer” Claims Annie
#5. Always suspected there was something off with Daddy Warbucks. It was right there in front of us the entire time!
#2 very funny! Biting.
#4 also very funny, and literally biting. As a non-parent and anti-having-kids, it made me feel superior to parents. So it worked not because of relatability or empathy, but the opposite.
Liking #3 a lot. Lose "You Dweeb".
hahahah 4 and 5 are great and intriguing. the helpless tone of 4 is really hitting for me.
#3 definitely.
#2!
#1 made me snort, lol
3 is too real right now. :…( 5 sounds really funny! If you do 1, I think you’d have to give us brief, unobtrusive refresher somehow for those of us who haven’t read the novel in a while!
I love 1!!
Hah haha #4 so good
I like 2 best.
1 jumped out at me!
I like 1 and 4. Maybe on 4 you add "that nobody admits to asking" or "quietly struggles with" to let us know these are not commonly discussed
I like #1 for geek purposes!
I really love 2!
The teeth! I love 4. and would love to see more of what you'd do with #2.
#4 intrigues me... I assume you're talking about their baby teeth?
Day 5 on the humor challenge track, with headlines of varying lengths. Again, thanks for the rec in today’s newsletter.
1. An Adaptation of Dogtanian and the Three Muskehounds, With Humans Instead of Animals, Written by Someone Completely Unfamiliar With the Original Story by Alexandre Dumas.
2. MC Escher Hip-Hop Album Gets Mixed, Contradictory Reviews
3. Hercules at the Job Fair
4. We Sailed the Deadliest Seas in Search of the Giant X on the Map And All We Got Was This Lousy Chest of Gold
5. Pied Piper of Hamelin Auditions for the Band on the Titanic
Feels like #1 could just be this: An Adaption of Dogtanian and the Three Muskehounds, but with Humans Instead of Animals
3 and 4!
Agreed! I love 3 and 4
I think 5 would be great because there's sooo much room for you to make hilarious jokes about how his rider is 50 children who he has to keep enthralled at all times so they don't realise they've been abducted from their German village. I do wonder if there are other things you could also have him audition for (i.e. it could just be me but packing the Titanic and Pied Piper together didn't strike me as the most natural fit for a joke even thought it's entertaining!) such as Lower Saxony's Got Talent or something?
#3 & #5!
I think this is mostly a function of me not being familiar with the other references. I live in the US but didn't grow up here, & on top of that, general pop culture awareness/interest is below average - in case that helps as a data point.
Btw I think you could drop "of Hamelin"! Unless that was deliberate in trying to make it sound more formal, or some other reason. I've heard of Pied Piper (enough to get the joke), but when I saw "of Hamelin", I had to google that to see if there was an obvious joke there that I wasn't getting.
Nicely done overall!
I like 4!
echoing that I would love to read 4!
I especially love 1 and 4
Number 4 please.
I laughed out loud when I read 4.
Love 4.
I like #1 and #4
Laughed at 3, 4 &5. I think #3 is my fav
#4 made me LOL
Day 5 headline:
Neil deGrasse Tyson Explains What Smash Mouth Got Wrong About Walking On The Sun
Great.
Ha. I'm definitely intrigued by this headline!
Ditto! This is great
It's been really fun this week, Alex. Thanks!
1) The Least Used Emojis Plead Their Case
2) Scenes from “Obtaineth a License at ye olde DMV” by W. Shakespeare
3) Marriage Vows Written by People Who’ve Been Married For Too Long
4) The 7 Habits of Highly Effective Perimenopausal Women
5) Urgent Questions From Your Friend Who Is Not At All Self-Centered
I like 1 best
1 and 2 are my favorites!
#4!!
All very funny. #1 made me laugh because it's just, well, funny, and silly. I also like #3 a lot.
Hard to choose a favorite, but #1! I'm not sure if the titled intended to hint at this, but my brain immediately started thinking about these emojis pleading for their lives 😂
I like all of these, but my faves are #1 and #4
#1 seems fun!
I like #5
Laughed at 1! Great visual dimension to the joke, too. My mind started picturing the eggplant emoji for some reason.
I need to read 4!! 😆 All these are great though!
I like 5 best.
hi writers! here are today's Humor Writing headlines:
1. Open Letter From Your TikTok Algorithm
2. Fall Outfit Ideas That Don't Involve Your Boyfriend's Denim Jacket
3. AI’s Not Going To Take Your Job, But The CEO’s Cousin Larry Probably Will
4. It’s Me, Your Brain! How About A Quick 45-Question Survey Before You Fall Asleep?
5. Ambitious Plan To Wake Up Early And Exercise Thwarted By Who You Are As A Person
5 all day.
3, 4, and 5 are great. 4 is so relatable and also you've got a fantastic comedic form there ready to go for a hilarious piece with callbacks, cyclical thinking, spiralling etc. I'd want to read that one!
I like #1 and #4
4 and 5 are my favorites
i love all of these, i would probably click on 4 first!
I like #5, we are all our own worst enemy :)
wow these are all so strong. i vote for all 5!
These are all great, but I love the survey one in #4
Great list! I love 2, 3, 4, and 5! I'd probably click on 1, too.
#3, Nepo Nepo
I feel 5 in my soul. I love the idea in 4!!
I like #2 best.
tough choice! I narrowed it down to #2, #4 and #5. Can especially relate to the quick 45 question survey. ;-)
Ha on #3! And let's just say I resemble #5.
I like #2 and #5 !
Day 5 headlines: The shorter the better!
1. A high income zombie’s guide to weight loss.
2. Weight Watcher’s Waffles will widen your waist. Wait what?
3. The benefits of micro dosing crack.
4. Emotional support dogs for your dog.
5. Poker player wins tournament by removing eyebrows.
Bonus: Penile Obesity
4 is great
Love 4 the most +also 5
Love assonance, so 2. is fun - but 4 is a great premise, and 5 is a really funny stand-alone headline.
I prefer #4!
#1, diet tips? LOL.
Love 5, followed by 1.
Like 4 too, but pretty sure that's be written already. I'd google it to make sure.
4 had me giggling!!
#2! very intriguing premise
LOVE #4 !!! Also #2.
Hey y'all, stand up jokes...let me know which you think is strongest or feel free to offer any suggestions on how to tighten/improve.
1. My mother was tough. She’d insist I follow her rules. She thought she knew everything. But at the end of her life she softened and said she found God. Which was weird because in her mind SHE was God....Wait, does that mean I have a half-brother?
2. When my kids were growing up I worried about bullying, drugs, drinking. And that’s just at the family reunion.
3. When I was a teenager, I asked my mom if I needed to douche. She said, no, my vagina was like a self-cleaning oven. Don’t put anything in there that you wouldn’t put in your mouth. I can tell you tampons taste awful.
2 is tight, gets to the punchline - I like it!
#3 for me!
I like them all, but #3 is my fave!
#2!
#2!!
#2!
2 and then 1!
2!
My favorite is #2
these are all funny! #2 is my favorite
#2 is my favorite. I like #3, but I immediately went to.
When I was a teenager, I asked my mom if I needed to douche. She said, no, my vagina was like a self-cleaning oven. Just wipe out the ash once a month.
hahaha
Love the Family Reunion joke
Lol, I like them all!
hahahaha number 3 is great. maybe you could add something like "but i've always been a rebel" in there before admitting that tampons aren't delicious
Yooo! That Kevin Hart SNL skit was hilarious.
Here are my 5 (or 6) headlines!
1. What The Fuck Am I Looking At? Brutally Honest Commentary on Trending Abstract Art
2. Social Inequality Spotted! No Blind People At Local Nudist Colonies
3. Why You Shouldn't Use Deodorant (If You Wanna Get Laid)
4. Why Using AXE Dark Temptation Body Spray Is Not The Aphrodisiac You Think It Is
5. Advertisers Sad You're Using Ad Block On A Free Platform With Genuinely Helpful Products Personalized To You You Ungrateful Son of a Bitch
BONUS:
6. Being Cool No Longer Cool. Being Silly Chicken Now Trending.
Hope I won't get banned for sneaking an extra in there haha.
Have a nice ass weekend guys! =)
#4
loved #1, #5 nearly made me spit out my beer.
#3 and #4 didn't work as strongly for me, because (as a guy) i already know axe won't get me laid. my hunch is that most people watching those ads feel the same. so wondering if it expectation could be thwarted in some other way? sorry i don't have a useful suggestion, because just going with the opposite "axe WILL get you laid" doesn't work either, coz that's what the ad is saying. sorry don't know if this helped at all!
I LOVE #1
It’s 4 for me!!
I like 4 best
#1 and #4 both made me LOL. Anyone who thinks AXE Dark Temptation Body Spray is an aphrodisiac needs to keep at minimum six feet social distance. (Let's see what sort of punishment for adding a sixth.)
oh my gosh I love 5, but I think 1 I want to see on a personal level as someone who went to a very abstract art exhibit where I felt like I'd been conned.
Love attacking advertisers in #5. Wonder if it becomes funnier if you add a name into the headline to it gets REALLY personal. like, "We Customized This Ad Just For You, Mark, And You're Going To Ignore It, You Ungrateful Son Of A Bitch?"
That’s hilarious. Thanks!
I like 5 best!
I like the concept of #5 best. #1 also made me smile.
rough idea for shortening #5:
Marketers: Stop Ad-Blocking Our Personalized Product Plugs, You Ungrateful Son of a Bitch!
Haha that’s great!
would love to hear the argument for #3
Headline Drafts:
1. Responsible Use Checklist: Contact Lenses
2. Please Complete Your Financial Disclosure Form to Participate in Secret Santa
3. I Thought I Was in a Loving Relationship Until I Saw the Akron Zoo Gibbons
Number 2.
hahaha #3 made me lol. so absurd & "aww".
i didn't fully get #2 - is it to filter out the broke?
Thank you! For #2, I was inspired by financial conflicts of interest disclosures and questionnaires done in healthcare/research compliance. I was thinking of making one that would more so filter out people who may give 'bad' or cheesy gifts. I wouldn't want it to sound like a diss on broke/poor people, though, as that sounds too mean-spirited, so I'll think about it some more.
#2 is awesome! I love #3 as well
2 is hilarious. I like 3 too
I like the weirdness of 3.
Def. #2.
I like 3 best.
Secret Santa is a winner! Especially for people who have been screwed with a lame secret Santa in the past. This could be so funny!
1 and 2! I think 2 draws me in more and is one I'd love to see before Christmas.
I like the specificity of the reference in #3. I am intrigued!
I love #2 and #3
both #2 and #3 made me laugh
2 and 3 are my favs. Would love to see a visual for #3
more praise for #2!
hahahaha #2 for sure
Hi all, here's my Friday Five (humor headlines). Some pithier than others...
1. Let's Get Down To Brass Tacks: Holy Shit Are Those Things Ugly
2. 10 No-Fail Weeknight Meal Ideas for Failures
3. They're Back to School! Go Get 'Em Kaylie (Kindergarten), Devin (2nd Grade), and Leonard (Continuing Education Class in Urban Farming, Tuesdays at 7).
4. Your Weekly Screen Time Report, With Judgy Commentary
5. I Placed Third in a Reality Baking-Engineering Competition Show. So Why am I Still Unemployable?
I like 4!
#5, LOL.
#1, #2, #5. All fun.
Number 3 got a big laugh from me! :)
I like 4 best.
4 is highly relatable and could be very funny!
#3...poor Leonard!
#4! Solid premise and very relatable!
Love #4 because I feel the judgy commentary in my bones!
4! I already feel judged seeing the times so added context would be great.
Thanks Kyrie. Do you think it's important to try to get that context into the headline?
Oh no! I think the title is crisp and clear, I immediately knew what kind of satire it was generally going to be and here for it whatever form it takes.
Awesome - thanks for the feedback.
I like the concept of #4 best. Curious about the tone of the judgy commentary... Do you have a specific voice in mind?
Hi - thanks, and great question. I think the premise here is that it always feels awful to see how much time you spend on meaningless apps, and this will make you feel even worse. So the voice, I think, is your smart phone, all-knowing and getting very granular about your app choices. like "Huh, 37 minutes on Candy Crush Saga Sunday morning - I noticed you were at the softball park. Did you at least look up when your daughter was at bat, or did you not want to lose that lollipop hammer?" Thoughts?
The ai caring more about the daughter is great, and would be a fun through-line if it got progressively more angry that the phone owner was missing precious moments.
3 made me genuinely chortle, and #2 was great as well
I both love and am frightened by #4!
Love the escalation in #3! (I really like #4, too)